that sounds better. It should be a dryish, bitter beer but not quite as bitter as a bohemien pils.
Ide go with sonething in the line of w34/70 or WLP830 german lager over the s23. its a bit fruity.
have a look at the BJCP style guideline at
http://www.bjcp.org/styles04/
its the other thing to know off by heart.
I have printed coppies of the whole thing to read over when im planning something.
here is what it says for a german pils. It doesnt give you recipe specifics, thats up to you, it just tells you what the beer should be like.
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2A. German Pilsner (Pils)
Aroma: Typically features a light grainy malt character (sometimes Graham cracker-like) and distinctive flowery or spicy noble hops. Clean, no fruity esters, no diacetyl. May have an initial sulfury aroma (from water and/or yeast) and a low background note of DMS (from pils malt).
Appearance: Straw to light gold, brilliant to very clear, with a creamy, long-lasting white head.
Flavor: Crisp and bitter, with a dry to medium-dry finish. Moderate to moderately-low yet well attenuated maltiness, although some grainy flavors and slight malt sweetness are acceptable. Hop bitterness dominates taste and continues through the finish and lingers into the aftertaste. Hop flavor can range from low to high but should only be derived from German noble hops. Clean, no fruity esters, no diacetyl.
Mouthfeel: Medium-light body, medium to high carbonation.
Overall Impression: Crisp, clean, refreshing beer that prominently features noble German hop bitterness accentuated by sulfates in the water.
History: A copy of Bohemian Pilsener adapted to brewing conditions in Germany.
Comments: Drier and crisper than a Bohemian Pilsener with a bitterness that tends to linger more in the aftertaste due to higher attenuation and higher-sulfate water. Lighter in body and color, and with higher carbonation than a Bohemian Pilsener. Modern examples of German pilsners tend to become paler in color, drier in finish, and more bitter as you move from South to North in Germany.
Ingredients: Pilsner malt, German hop varieties (especially noble varieties such as Hallertauer, Tettnanger and Spalt for taste and aroma), medium sulfate water, German lager yeast.
Vital Statistics:OG FG IBUs SRM ABV
1.044 - 1.050 1.008 - 1.013 25 - 45 2 - 5 4.4 - 5.2%
so acording to this a 1.050 40 IBU beer brewed with a dry finishing german lager yeast and using nothing but german hops would be perfect.
Id loose the saaz and go all hallertau for something authentic for sure.
tetnanger is a great hop to try too.
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